Due to some issues with your application, we would like to see some revisions on the following:

-> While this is an improvement over the previous app submission, it is still over the maximum wordcount and relies a little too heavily on source canon familiarity. We'd like to see a revision that brings it under the wordcount and makes the details and events of the AU a little easier to follow for a layman.

Please respond to this comment within 72 hours with these changes!